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Poets
Opaque Universe
societiesworm
Date:
January 28, 2006 @ 9:43 PM
I wish things would fall slower
Just So I'd get a chance to catch em'
But gravity takes its toll
on the many souls that consume its force
But the universe is too much to know
and eventually will be to little
continuity or never ending space?
Don't worry it will all be erased
Just a plane of blackness
with no fixed direction
figments of brightness
waging wars on each other
welcome to the universe
says a nebula to the earth
cosmos upon and within each other
at least until a true truth is discovered
giant stars die and a reborn to kill
regardless they live forever
a hundred years on earth
is nothing compared to the universe
just planes of blackness
direction is a possible factor
brightness occupies the plane
and things look rather insane
galaxies in the wierdest of forms
some look hellish some look pleasant
one of which we know holds life
some of which are very distant
your leaving the universe
says a gamma ray burst
but I'm from the origins of space
take time and discover this unknown place
just a plane of whiteness
or blackness, not really sure
though uknown things do exist
the truth will most likely be missed.
AbortiveMind
Date:
January 29, 2006 @ 6:37 AM
Except for the spelling mistakes
, I must say
that this is a very very nice poem
I'm liking
the idea you share with us, but there are some
elements I might contradict (but I'm not going
deeper into that
) Definately an interesting
subject that has been described with some very
imagesfull words
gurdonark
Date:
January 29, 2006 @ 7:43 AM
I think often about this issue--"too much to
know"--it's all so much to know, and yet so
interesting.
societiesworm
Date:
January 29, 2006 @ 12:59 PM
thanks guys for looking at it. yep it is all to
much to know but can be very interesting.
TegidC
Date:
February 3, 2006 @ 6:28 PM
I like this, gives me the impression of, not a
wasted life, not the your insignificant but that
your part of something much bigger and you affect
it but on the whole you are smaller than things
which far surpass you in beauty and importance.
If that's the kind of impression your going for
then you've fullfilled your intention. Anyhow, I
greatly enjoyed this one, great flow, great
imagery and excellent impression all well
explored. Cool.
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