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societiesworm	Date: January 28, 2006 @ 9:43 PM I wish things would fall slower Just So I'd get a chance to catch em' But gravity takes its toll on the many souls that consume its force But the universe is too much to know and eventually will be to little continuity or never ending space? Don't worry it will all be erased Just a plane of blackness with no fixed direction figments of brightness waging wars on each other welcome to the universe says a nebula to the earth cosmos upon and within each other at least until a true truth is discovered giant stars die and a reborn to kill regardless they live forever a hundred years on earth is nothing compared to the universe just planes of blackness direction is a possible factor brightness occupies the plane and things look rather insane galaxies in the wierdest of forms some look hellish some look pleasant one of which we know holds life some of which are very distant your leaving the universe says a gamma ray burst but I'm from the origins of space take time and discover this unknown place just a plane of whiteness or blackness, not really sure though uknown things do exist the truth will most likely be missed.
AbortiveMind	Date: January 29, 2006 @ 6:37 AM Except for the spelling mistakes , I must say that this is a very very nice poem I'm liking the idea you share with us, but there are some elements I might contradict (but I'm not going deeper into that ) Definately an interesting subject that has been described with some very imagesfull words
gurdonark	Date: January 29, 2006 @ 7:43 AM I think often about this issue--"too much to know"--it's all so much to know, and yet so interesting.
societiesworm	Date: January 29, 2006 @ 12:59 PM thanks guys for looking at it. yep it is all to much to know but can be very interesting.
TegidC	Date: February 3, 2006 @ 6:28 PM I like this, gives me the impression of, not a wasted life, not the your insignificant but that your part of something much bigger and you affect it but on the whole you are smaller than things which far surpass you in beauty and importance. If that's the kind of impression your going for then you've fullfilled your intention. Anyhow, I greatly enjoyed this one, great flow, great imagery and excellent impression all well explored. Cool.

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